Its the time when the birds retreat
I've been waiting for someone to show me the way
The one that I lost as you led me astray.
My life has been like a spinning top
Going around in circles.
With no real purpose, until you came along.
I have been here before, I remember vaguely
It used to be so bright as we walked slowly
Hand in hand, it seemed so surreal
I should have known, it was too good to be real
Now I feel like the wind in my sails have been taken away
Like a horse whose rider has fallen
There is no joy, no pain, just plain numbness
As I stand alone reflecting on myself.
I see a silhouette, in the distant horizon
There is still hope, or is it a false dawn?
The person is not moving, in fact even retreating
As all my hopes comes crashing down to earth.
Why am I alone, why do I have to suffer?
I ask thy my almighty lord
When you are smiling, the whole world laughs with you
But when things go southwards...???
We are lost in this world. Things moving too fast.
The tiny rays of hope keeping us going
The more you try to hold on to something, like water in your hands
Slowly seeps away, with only memories remaining
To remind you of those blissful times, those moments
When you had not a worry, not a care about anything
Slowly they move away, gently and gradually picking up speed
Till they are seen no more, truly FADING TO OBLIVION
8 comments:
to fade into oblivion is not too difficult to describe ... however, the events that results in fading into oblivion are the ones that are really difficult to describe and i think it is a wonderful job on that level
Truly brings out the persistent nature of the 'phase', not to mention the desperate longing to see it all come to an end. It all lies there on the surface, almost palpable.
Kudos Ravi! Penetrating stuff!
Nice Read!
cool dude.....
words flow like a glacial river
I bet, even a pro will shiver
But don't let this stop ever again
peacocks are dancing, its going to rain ..
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jhakkas hain bhai .. mast ekdum :)
bas ab regularly likhana ....
I didn't knew that we have got connoisseur in one more area(ofcourse other are Music and Food).
Nice Start Ravi...Wish to see u in the league of Eliots and Kiplings
'When you are smiling, the whole world laughs with you
But when things go southwards...???'
--My Fav lines
If u mean wht I imagine, I guess its an amazing bit of imagination....I mean wht did u mean by southwards ???
What I felt was, when we smile...the lips are curled up pointing up or the north, and the opposite when we are sad...is that ur southward ???
wOw...Nice combination of simple yet meaningful lines...rhyming yet not so obvious...
thnks everyone...
@Jaiki: Well you kind of summed up what I was trying to say... :)
@Raju: Thnks da, Will try some more stuff which I hope penetrates even more... (Resisting hard not to tell a PJ)
@Shikhar: you ain't seen nothing mate.
@Shashank: Thnks man. Hope I can deliver much better quality
@Dilip: As we discussed, would have been really good had we all known each other better in college. Well somethings are destined and will happen only when it is the right time
@Shashi: Thnks for that, even though I could feel the sarcasm oozing in that comment, still made me feel good... :)
@Udi: Well, since you are the one I look upto when it comes to scribbling lines, it means a lot that you liked it. And yes the southwards reference is indeed referring to the frown. Read the phrase somewhere, wanted to try it out.
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